Comments on: He Said, She Said: A Tale of Two Scenes

By: Liz Falkner

Liz Falkner — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 17:12:04 +0000

I enjoyed both POVs. It was interesting that both characters were on the same wavelength but journeyed differently to get there.

This was excellent!

By: Kouba

Kouba — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 12:13:35 +0000

Interesting and informative. But will you write about this one more?

By: Southern Fried Chicas » Blog Archive » More of the same

Southern Fried Chicas » Blog Archive » More of the same — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 02:58:11 +0000

[...] Romance University has a very fascinating post up. Two writers—one male and one female—were asked to write the same scene just to see how different the male/female perspective was. I noticed immediately that their focuses were different, right down to the details they chose to highlight. The male voice (at least to me) felt more confident and aggressive. While the female voice, while equally engaging and entertaining, was less sure and … I’d say ’softer.’ Go take a look see and give me an opinion. FWIW, while they’re both great, I kinda like his better. I’m more drawn to his voice. [...]

By: Kathy Crouch

Kathy Crouch — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 17:37:17 +0000

Now this was interesting how she tossed off what she was wearing nonchantly and then descirbed his clothing in detail. Mario did the opposite but didn’t give a brand name like Jeanne did. Both povs were great ways to view the scene.

By: Beppie Harrison

Beppie Harrison — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 14:09:02 +0000

How should I say it? A demonstration is worth a thousand words? You could post those two examples as a classic demonstration of the difference in male/female perception — using the same dialog was a touch of brilliance. The nub of the matter, it seems to me, is how he perceived her and how she perceives herself.

Absolutely fascinating.

By: Adrienne Giordano

Adrienne Giordano — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 13:50:21 +0000

Thank you Jeanne and Mario for being with us today. I loved this post! The thing I noticed was how the male vamp immediately checked out the female (typical male!), while the female noticed the surroundings first. LOL.

Fun stuff!

By: Kelsey Browning

Kelsey Browning — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 13:36:14 +0000

Mario & Jeanne –

Thanks so much for joining us today! I loved reading the subtle differences between your scenes. It seemed as though Mario’s scene emphasized action a little more, while Jeanne’s heroine thought about how she felt about being at the wedding.

Good stuff!
Kelsey

By: carrie

carrie — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 13:14:24 +0000

morning all!

Oh, what fun reading! =) Nothing like a good vampire story to get the blood flowing first thing in the morning… lol….(ok, yeah, it really is too early for puns)

The biggest difference I noticed was that in Mario’s version “She wore a designer dress, a glamorous slinky number that covered her trim form with just enough material to remain decent. Stiletto pumps made her legs look dangerously inviting. ” and in Jeanne’s “But I’m wearing an Armani jersey number and Jimmy Choos. ”

Mario describes the outfit in detail, Jeanne’s description includes brand names, and lets the woman design the outfit herself with those names.

For the man’s outfit…Mario says “I smoothed the front of my white shirt. “I was close.” I wore black jeans with a black leather jacket.” and Jeanne says “black jeans, white dress shirt, leather motorcycle jacket, short zip-up boots.” Now in this one, Jeanne describes his outfit with much more detail and Mario describes the mans outfit with much less detail than the womans.

That’s what popped out at me the most! =)

carrie

By: Natalie

Natalie — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 13:09:44 +0000

This was fascinating — thanks to both the writers for doing this. The difference in the presentation of the physical details was so interesting. In Mr. Acevedo’s version, the physical details of the cake, the room, the view is presented mostly factually with a little zippy commentary (the “ain’t no recession here”), but Ms. Stein’s version is presented much more though her mood, filtered through her “I don’t want to be here” mood. I loved the difference in how the male vamp experienced the vibe from the female vamp and how she experienced it herself.

Thanks again!

By: Tracey Devlyn

Tracey Devlyn — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 10:47:49 +0000

Jeanne and Mario, thank you for accepting our challenge! And a special thanks to Holly for the fabulous idea.

I loved the contrasting viewpoints. Very interesting how the female vamp went from mysterious and sexy (male) to bored and average Joe (female). The male vamp didn’t seem to vary much.

Thanks again,
Tracey