Comments on: Wrong Turn onto Passive Lane http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/ Mon, 21 May 2012 10:48:36 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.2 By: Lynsey Ragel http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-8848 Lynsey Ragel Fri, 26 Nov 2010 09:32:30 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-8848 Nice website! I enjoy a couple of from the articles which have been written, and particularly the comments posted! I will definately be returning! Nice website! I enjoy a couple of from the articles which have been written, and particularly the comments posted! I will definately be returning!

]]> By: carrie http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2424 carrie Mon, 23 Nov 2009 16:12:37 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2424 me???? woot woot! Thanks Eliza.....looking forward to it very much!! carrie me???? woot woot! Thanks Eliza…..looking forward to it very much!!

carrie

]]> By: Judith Hanes http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2407 Judith Hanes Sat, 21 Nov 2009 20:20:32 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2407 Great article Eliza, Dropped by too late to enter the contest, but enjoyed your paragraphs! I'll revisit this site often for new ideas and hints about writing! Great article Eliza, Dropped by too late to enter the contest, but enjoyed your paragraphs! I’ll revisit this site often for new ideas and hints about writing!

]]> By: Eliza Knight http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2404 Eliza Knight Sat, 21 Nov 2009 18:59:53 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2404 All of these were so great I couldn't decide! So I let my daughter do a random drawing....and the winner of a free workshop is....drum roll.....Carrie. Please email me writer@elizaknight.com :) All of these were so great I couldn’t decide! So I let my daughter do a random drawing….and the winner of a free workshop is….drum roll…..Carrie. Please email me writer@elizaknight.com :)

]]> By: althea preston http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2403 althea preston Sat, 21 Nov 2009 15:04:09 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2403 I do think it's easier to break it down into the shorter, showing of the story to start with and then work through it to make it richer as you go. I went to bed last night, mulling the brief sentences I'd posted yesterday and woke up this morning with a very full couple of paragraphs running through my head. I think it's the difference (at least for me) of getting the original down on paper while it's fresh so I don't forget it and then have the luxury of 'filling in the blanks' later on. Some writers can do that as they go. Me, not always so much. Thanks! :) I do think it’s easier to break it down into the shorter, showing of the story to start with and then work through it to make it richer as you go. I went to bed last night, mulling the brief sentences I’d posted yesterday and woke up this morning with a very full couple of paragraphs running through my head.

I think it’s the difference (at least for me) of getting the original down on paper while it’s fresh so I don’t forget it and then have the luxury of ‘filling in the blanks’ later on.

Some writers can do that as they go. Me, not always so much.

Thanks! :)

]]> By: carrie http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2399 carrie Sat, 21 Nov 2009 04:26:58 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2399 His hand stroked the length of curtain. Up. Down. Up. Down. Each stroke was magnified as though it were her skin beneath his fingertips, her skin feeling the heat of his, her skin that shivered against his touch. On a delicious sigh, she watched his beautiful face. He looked down at her, his eyes no longer a burning emerald, but a deep, impenetrable black. He sucked in a breath, nostrils flaring, and whispered her name. Sorry, I'm late too.....lol...and obviously need some more serious help on show vs tell! carrie His hand stroked the length of curtain. Up. Down. Up. Down. Each stroke was magnified as though it were her skin beneath his fingertips, her skin feeling the heat of his, her skin that shivered against his touch. On a delicious sigh, she watched his beautiful face. He looked down at her, his eyes no longer a burning emerald, but a deep, impenetrable black. He sucked in a breath, nostrils flaring, and whispered her name.

Sorry, I’m late too…..lol…and obviously need some more serious help on show vs tell!

carrie

]]> By: Kelsey Browning http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2398 Kelsey Browning Sat, 21 Nov 2009 02:50:36 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2398 Hi Eliza - What a fun exercise! Sorry I was a bit absent today (actually it's now tomorrow where I am :)). Baseball and other weekend stuff. Wonderful post - thank you for being with us again. Maybe I'll take a stab at the paragraph once I've had a cup of coffee! Kelsey Hi Eliza -

What a fun exercise! Sorry I was a bit absent today (actually it’s now tomorrow where I am :) ). Baseball and other weekend stuff.

Wonderful post – thank you for being with us again. Maybe I’ll take a stab at the paragraph once I’ve had a cup of coffee!

Kelsey

]]> By: Tracey Devlyn http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2397 Tracey Devlyn Sat, 21 Nov 2009 01:57:47 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2397 Hi Eliza, Sorry for being so late! Thank you for joining us again at RU. I really enjoyed this exercise. Here's my stab... He waited until the sun slipped beneath the horizon before turning her way. His large hand slid down the gold brocade curtain with a spine-curling sensuality that left Gracie breathless. And aching. An eternity of silence stretched before them. His emerald gaze darkened into a swirling pool of jet black and his nostrils flared as if he caught her scent. Tracey Hi Eliza,

Sorry for being so late! Thank you for joining us again at RU. I really enjoyed this exercise. Here’s my stab…

He waited until the sun slipped beneath the horizon before turning her way. His large hand slid down the gold brocade curtain with a spine-curling sensuality that left Gracie breathless. And aching. An eternity of silence stretched before them. His emerald gaze darkened into a swirling pool of jet black and his nostrils flared as if he caught her scent.

Tracey

]]> By: Mary McCall http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2396 Mary McCall Sat, 21 Nov 2009 01:54:57 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2396 The curtain rippled in a silken breath as strong tan finger ran down the brocade's length. Her heart slammed as heat roiled down her spine in time with his motion. Forcing the breath from her lungs, she took another, trying to still the frantic beating in her chest. What a mistake, his scent drifted about the room forcing a new onslaught of spiraling emotional discord. He faced her with a slight grin. The glittering emerald eyes grazing her up and down added to her distress. She raised a hand to her neck, attempting to hide her bounding pulse. HIs nostrils flared. The hitch of his breath echoed through her head as his pupils dilated with desire. Her body tingled with awareness of his virility, his sensuality, the power of his gaze. Could he know the of the turmult warring inside her? Did he feel the same? Great blog, Eliza! Thanks for the pointers. The curtain rippled in a silken breath as strong tan finger ran down the brocade’s length. Her heart slammed as heat roiled down her spine in time with his motion. Forcing the breath from her lungs, she took another, trying to still the frantic beating in her chest. What a mistake, his scent drifted about the room forcing a new onslaught of spiraling emotional discord. He faced her with a slight grin. The glittering emerald eyes grazing her up and down added to her distress. She raised a hand to her neck, attempting to hide her bounding pulse. HIs nostrils flared. The hitch of his breath echoed through her head as his pupils dilated with desire. Her body tingled with awareness of his virility, his sensuality, the power of his gaze. Could he know the of the turmult warring inside her? Did he feel the same?

Great blog, Eliza! Thanks for the pointers.

]]> By: Megan Mackas http://romanceuniversity.org/2009/11/20/wrong-turn-onto-passive-lane/comment-page-1/#comment-2395 Megan Mackas Sat, 21 Nov 2009 00:22:29 +0000 http://romanceuniversity.org/?p=2052#comment-2395 His hand ran up and down the length of the curtain. She trembled with the thought of his fingertips touching her skin instead of the brocade fabric. Her breath hitched and he spun around, pinned her in place with his dark gaze. The otherwise empty theater amplified the sound of his ragged breath. Knees weak with need, she shifted on her feet. His nostrils flared and his once emerald eyes glinted ink black in the dim light. Her palms dampened with the knowledge that tonight, he was hers... His hand ran up and down the length of the curtain. She trembled with the thought of his fingertips touching her skin instead of the brocade fabric. Her breath hitched and he spun around, pinned her in place with his dark gaze. The otherwise empty theater amplified the sound of his ragged breath. Knees weak with need, she shifted on her feet. His nostrils flared and his once emerald eyes glinted ink black in the dim light. Her palms dampened with the knowledge that tonight, he was hers…

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