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Ask an Editor: Theresa Stevens on Ten Steps to A Clean Submission

Did you receive a request for material while attending RWA’s national conference? If so, are you frantically giving your manuscript another sweep of your editorial eye? Whether you received a request or you’re submitting to the slush pile, editor Theresa Stevens has provided some great tips below to help you through the process. Read on!

Some of you will be sending in requested material as a result of the recent conferences. Because you want your submission to be as clean as possible, here are some tips to help you with the final edits. Each item on this list is a common problem in raw work, and it’s something that can get your manuscript rejected. We’ll take these in order of scale, from big picture to small detail.

1. Match the Edges.

Look at the big problem that’s set up in the opening of your book. When is it resolved? If it’s in the last chapter or two, good. If not, your book might have structural problems which will require a fairly extensive rewrite. The general idea is that the opening and ending should match in terms of plot: the major conflict established in the opening should be resolved in the end. (There are exceptions to this rule, such as stories with lead-in conflicts or “false” openings, but those are rare in romance.)

2. Check the Major Characters.

Isolate the scenes in which each of your major characters appears. This is easy to do if you use the cut and paste function in your word processor. Take all the scenes with your hero, and lay them out end to end in a separate file. Then do the same for your heroine. Read these scenes in isolation to evaluate each character’s behavior. Is it consistent? Does it ever lapse into blandness? Is the character’s motivation clear throughout? Are there instances of melodrama?

3. Check the Minor Characters.

Make a list of your minor characters, and for each one, jot down the purpose each serves.  What happens to the plot if you remove that character? If there’s no penalty for removal, then remove the character. If there is a penalty, but it can be resolved by having a different secondary pick up the functions of the cut secondary, then rewrite those scenes accordingly.

4. Measure the Middle.

We already matched the ends of your story to check for one kind of large scale structural problem. Now let’s look at the middle. Make a list of the scenes in the middle of the book. (The middle is everything that happens after the conflict is defined but before the final crisis that leads to the ultimate resolution of the conflict.) Look at the major actions taken in each scene. Can you explain those actions using a “because” statement? If not, it’s time to think about why your characters are taking those actions. If so, check the scene carefully to be sure that this causation is clear on the page. The reader has to be able to understand those reasons.

5. Location, Location, Location.

As long as we’re looking at this list of scenes, make a note for each scene indicating where it’s set. Next, jot down all the ways the setting contributes to the action of the scene. For example, if they’re on a boat, does the rocking motion have an impact on the scene action? If they’re in a restaurant, does the noise level make conversation difficult? Does the scene have symolic relevance of some kind? If the environment isn’t relevant to the scene action, can you think of ways to leverage the setting? Can you think of a different setting that might be more interesting?

6. Scene Openings.

Look at the first five lines of each scene. In that first five lines, do you establish setting, point of view, and some sense of the scene’s purpose? Setting and point of view are essential to ground and orient the reader, but in some cases, we use the openings of scenes to do something a little more omniscient and less personal. Those are special scene openings that require special handling, but for most scenes, you will want to lock down the sense of orientation right away. The scene purpose can be small or large, external or internal, subtle or direct, but it ought to be there in some form. If you get these things out of the way early, then there’s less likelihood for confusion as the scene unfolds.

7. Scene Endings.

Some scenes will end with a sense of things being all buttoned up and neat and tidy. Most scenes will end with a sense of forward movement, though. Even if the scene question is answered, even if the scene problem is solved, the end of the scene should make the reader wonder what’s next. The character might think, “Well, that’s done now,” when thinking about the problem on which the scene focused. But you don’t want the reader to think, “Well, the story’s done now,” and close the book. You don’t have to end on a cliffhanger or make the scenes feel unresolved, but you do have to keep the story moving forward, and sometimes even a subtle reminder of other problems at the end of a tidy scene will keep the reader interested.

8. He Said, She Said.

Scan your pages for quotation marks. Every time a character speaks, do three things. First, check the puntuation and mechanics. Commas, periods, open and close quotes – make sure this is all shipshape. Then make sure the paragraph changes every time the speaker changes, and make sure there aren’t random paragraph changes in the middle of one character’s dialogue. Second, check the tags. Can any of them be converted to beats? Beats (small bits of action attached to dialogue) are stronger than tags (he said, she asked, he exclaimed, and so on). Third, check for whether the identity of the speaker is obvious. If there are three or more characters in a scene, use a tag or beat with every line of dialogue to avoid reader confusion. If there are only two characters in the scene, you don’t have to tag or beat every line of dialogue. You can skip as many as three in a row before reader comprehension might become an issue. And even then, you might be able to skip more, but it’s risky and should be handled carefully.

9. Search and Destroy Mission.

Now we’re getting into the nitty-gritty of sentence mechanics. I recommend using the “find and replace” function in your word processor to change the font color of any overused words or weak words (just, that, so, very, and similar words). Also use the font color change to highlight weak verbs and verbs of being or appearance (was, seemed, looked, and similar). Use it to highlight thought tag words (wondered, thought, pondered, and similar). Finally, use it to change the font color of the letter combination “ing.” This will highlight present participial phrases, though it will also highlight unobjectionable words like finger and sing. You can ignore these safe words, but for everything else you’ve highlighted, revise to eliminate the color changes. Be ruthless. These things weaken your story, and you don’t want to submit a weak story, do you?

10. The Safety Net.

Proofreading is not something to be done quickly or to be taken lightly. I recommend a multi-step process for proofreading, because each step can catch different kinds of errors. First, run the spell-checker. This will clean out all the easy mistakes. Second, read the pages out loud. This will force you to slow down enough so that your eyes won’t skip over any missing words. It will also help you spot clunky rhythms and awkward phrasings. Third, do a separate proofreading pass for punctuation. It can be easy to overlook little details like commas in a regular proofreading pass, so a dedicated punctuation pass will help you catch more mistakes. If you’re worried that you might get sucked into the story again and overlook details during proofreading, then read the paragraphs in reverse order. You can either do all the passes on each paragraph before moving backward to the next, or you can do the entire chapter or manuscript in separate full passes.

These ten steps are time-consuming, to be sure, but then, so is the process of writing a novel. Don’t skimp on the last stages just because you can see the finish line. It’s far better to take a few extra days to make sure everything is clean and tight. Just take it step by step, and before you know it, your manuscript will be ready to dazzle the first reader.

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Do you have any special revision and editing techniques? Share them in the comments!

Thinking of writing erotic romance? Stop by Jennifer Probst’s post Monday to see if you have the right stuff.

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Theresa Stevens is the Publisher of STAR Guides Publishing, a nonfiction publishing company with the mission to help writers write better books. After earning degrees in creative writing and law, she worked as a literary attorney agent for a boutique firm in Indianapolis where she represented a range of fiction and nonfiction authors.

After a nine-year hiatus from the publishing industry to practice law, Theresa worked as chief executive editor for a highly acclaimed small romance press, and her articles on writing and editing have appeared in numerous publications for writers. Visit her blog at http://edittorrent.blogspot.com/ where she and her co-blogger share their knowledge and hardly ever argue about punctuation.

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31 Responses to “Ask an Editor: Theresa Stevens on Ten Steps to A Clean Submission”

  1. Hi Theresa,

    I love these tips! In my last revision, I pulled out all the loves scenes and read them separately to make sure I raised the emotional stakes each time. It was a great exercise.

    I’ll be writing this manuscript completely in Scrivener, which will help in pulling specific scenes for reading. Exciting!

    Thanks again,
    Tracey

    Posted by TraceyDevlyn | July 22, 2011, 5:08 am
  2. Morning Theresa!

    EXCELLENT article…wowsers. Definitely printing that off and keeping it by my computer. Especially location, location, location. My characters tend to appear in a vast wasteland of nothing but white paper. Poor things. =)

    My only major technique at the moment is to print it off. One chapter at a time, I print it off and read it (in bed!) with a pen in hand. I catch SO many little boo-boos and come up with so many ideas when I treat it like I’m reading a “real” book.

    That works for me, anyway…lol…=)

    Thanks for posting with us today Theresa! It’s awesomeness!

    carrie

    Posted by Carrie Spencer | July 22, 2011, 7:08 am
  3. Hi Theresa,

    Sometimes I start by writing the end. I know where everyone finishes, then I go back and get them there. Excellent points before submission.

    Mary Jo

    Posted by Mary Jo Burke | July 22, 2011, 7:30 am
  4. Theresa – This came at a perfect time for me. I’m sweating over these exact things. You’ve including a few steps I hadn’t thought of – thank you!

    I feel bad because I had two requests before the story was finished, and I’m still working on the polishing and revision two months later. I’m assuming they would rather get the submission clean than quick, but I still feel under pressure.

    Writing it was hard enough, but the revisions are more intimidating in many ways. I’m a basket case! Luckily, I have great critique partners who help me catch things like overused words. It’s frustrating how many things I missed in the first draft!

    Posted by Becke Martin/Davis | July 22, 2011, 8:00 am
  5. Hi Theresa!

    I don’t know what I’d do without the find/replace option in Word. As I’m doing my revisions, I jot down reoccurring words and then go back and change them with the find/replace.

    Great tips. I printed it off too!

    Posted by jennifer tanner | July 22, 2011, 8:11 am
  6. Theresa – Great post! I’m printing it out for my “writer’s notebook”.

    The one thing I do when I am editing is to have my book read out loud to me. (I got this tip from Angela James) I installed a free reader on my computer (naturalReader)and I sit with a printe dcopy in front of me and do a “read-through”. it is amazing what I pick up by hearing it instead of only reading it.

    Posted by Robin Covington | July 22, 2011, 8:34 am
  7. Theresa –

    Fabulous tips, as always! I need to take a page from Adrienne and Robin and create a writer’s notebook. I used to have bits I kept early on, but I find I need a different caliber of helpful resources these days :).

    Kelsey

    Posted by Kelsey Browning | July 22, 2011, 8:39 am
    • Kelsey, I use binders for this. That way, I can three-hole punch anything — pictures from magazines, folders, notes jotted on stray bits of paper — and get them in there. It’s a flexible tool, and I’m sure you’ll make the most of it!
      T

      Posted by Theresa Stevens | July 22, 2011, 9:51 am
  8. Thanks so much for the timely advice. I’m pitching to an editor tomorrow and I’ve spent the last month polishing, polishing, polishing. You gave me more things to look for. I also print my work out. It seems so much easier to find mistakes that way. I was recently informed by a fellow writer of the narrator function on my computer. I had no idea it would read my work to me. Even though it is a somewhat static voice, I have discovered some mistakes that way, also.

    Posted by Wanda Fittro | July 22, 2011, 9:23 am
  9. Great tips, Theresa! I use Excel to help me keep track of a lot of the details you mentioned. It’s amazing how it helps me see which scene is missing, or who has been hogging the POV. LOL

    I like the “scene purpose” you mention in #6. I hadn’t really thought of it that way before–but now I will!

    Posted by Donna Cummings | July 22, 2011, 9:30 am
    • Donna, I love spreadsheets with big rainbow-glitter-heart love. Just the simple process of filling in a scene sheet can reveal so many gaps — not to mention the way undiscovered themes can suddenly present themselves during this kind of analysis. Good tip!
      T

      Posted by Theresa Stevens | July 22, 2011, 9:57 am
  10. Theresa,

    Great post as usual.

    I build templates. I have a scene chart with three columns, one of which is revision. As I move from the draft stage, I note threads to make sure they are tied up later, anything I need to check, eg. repetition of favourite words or phrases. foreshadowing, timeline,etc.

    Your pointers are already printed. Thanks.

    Cia

    Posted by Cia | July 22, 2011, 10:39 am
  11. This is such a great article with so many great tips! I’m definitely printing it out for reference (and linked it to a writing community I frequent because I had to share it). I love what was said about location and how setting and what happens in that setting can reflect more subconscious elements of the plot, characters, conflict, etc.

    I like to take each scene individually and make sure I can jot down the POV for that scene, the goal, motivation, conflict, and “disaster” at the end that will propel the next scene. I think it helps keep the pace tight and keep the story from sagging.

    J.

    Posted by Julie H. | July 22, 2011, 10:45 am
  12. The tips are great – thanks for sharing. Number 3 resonates for me – I have a rule I live by – if a character is mentioned by name, then they must play a part in the resolution of a conflict. The only other rule I adhere to without fail, is that each scene must advance the plot.

    My biggest problem is elapsed time, so I keep an Excel spreadsheet for each chapter, with w/count, setting, day and time the chapter begins and ends, POV, and a list of the cast for that chapter.

    It’s anal, but it works for me.

    Thanks again for sharing.

    Posted by Jianne Carlo | July 22, 2011, 1:48 pm
  13. Great tips, Theresa. I have one to add: I weed out unnecessary adverbs by searching for “ly” at the end of a word.

    Posted by Andrea Wenger | July 22, 2011, 11:09 pm
  14. Hi Theresa,

    This is fantastic. You make it sound so simple. LOL. I putting this in my writing class journal.

    Thanks,

    Cindy

    Posted by Cindy Maday | July 27, 2011, 12:36 pm

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