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Writing Creepy Scenes by Rayne Hall

Rayne Hall PhotoPlease welcome back author and monthly RU contributor Rayne Hall.

Do you want to write a ghost story? Are you working on a thriller, an urban fantasy, a paranormal romance or a horror novel? Then you need to create at least one creepy scene. Give your readers the spooky, spine-tingling experience they enjoy.

Try these six professional techniques.

  1. Use Sound Effects

Weave many noises into your writing. Here are some ideas.

  • Voices

How do the voices sound?

Examples: Her voice screeched like a rusty hinge. He had the throaty voice of a heavy smoker. Her voice had the shrill persistence of a dentist’s drill. His voice rumbled like thunder.

If you place this descriptive sentence immediately after the spoken line, you don’t need to add ‘he/she said’.

  • Action Sounds

Almost everything a character does creates a noise, either directly or indirectly. The great thing about action sounds is that the description won’t slow the pace, so you can use them even in fast-paced scenes.

Examples: Her footsteps whispered across the sand. The door clicked back into the lock. The bunch of keys in his hands rattled. A floorboard creaked under my feet.

  • Background noises

Sounds unrelated to the action slow the pace but increase the suspense. This is perfect for situations where the main character is waiting for something. What’s the weather like? This may yield atmospheric details.

Examples: In the distance, a coyote howled. Keyboards clacked, printers whirred. and papers rustled. Wind banged the doors and rattled the shutters. Rain hammered against the window panes.


  1. Show the Creepy Creature’s Hands

When describing a monster, a villain or creepy person, find an opportunity to describe their hands or paws. Are they tanned or pale, pudgy or bony, scarred, calloused, grimy or carefully manicured?

If the point of view character experiences their touch, do the hands feel cool or hot, dry or sweaty, soft or rough? Describe the fingernails: long or short, chipped, nicotine-stained, with a shiny pink varnish or with black rims?

In the case of an animal or monster, are the paws leathery, hairy or covered in iridiscent scales? Are the talons dagger-straight or curved like scimitars? Are they matte like tarnished copper or do they shine like polished steel?


  1. Describe the Effects of Darkness, Light and Shadow
  • Set the scene in a dark or semi-dark place. It’s a deep-seated human instinct to be nervous in the dark, and as writers, we sulu-raynehall-halloween-fangscan play with that. Perhaps you can choose a dark location, such as a forest at night or an unlit cave. You could also let the camp-fire burn down, the torch battery go flat, a power cut turn off all lights, or the wind blow out the candle. Darkness reduces the vision. The character will hear, smell and feel more than usual, and this increases the creepiness and suspense.
  • Describe the source and quality of the light. Where does the light come from, and what does it look like?

Examples: The window slit admitted a mere sliver of light. Moonlight painted the landscape in eerie silver. Blinding light shot through the opening in the roof and painted a sharp rectangle on the carpet. Weak light filtered through the grime-streaked glass pane. A bare bulb overhead threw a puddle of harsh light on the concrete floor. The street lamps washed the road in their sulphurous glow. The horizon shimmered crimson in the wash of the setting sun.

  • Moving, flickering, disappearing and reappearing lights also add to a spooky effect. Describe the way the candle flickers or the way clouds ghost across the moon.

Examples: The door opened, and the candle flames flickered. Torches waved their yellow flames in the gloom. The overhead neon tube cast a harsh, flickering light. Flames rose and fell. Lanterns danced along the path.

  • Shadows add a wonderful layer of creepiness to any scene. Close your eyes, visualise the place, identify the shadows and include them.

Examples: Shadows lengthened and crept like tentacles across the yard. Grey shadows danced along the stone wall. In the light of the candle, his writing hand cast a faint shadow on the sheet.


  1. Enter Through a Door

To ratchet up the suspense, let the character enter through a door on the way to danger. To the reader’s subconscious, this represents a final barrier, the last chance to stay safe. Describe the door in one or several sentences—for example its appearance, how the doorknob feels in the character’s palm, and the sound when it opens.

Examples: The door’s white paint was flaking, revealing previous coats of crimson and grey.

‘Strictly No Entry. Danger Zone’, the sign on the door warned. The knob of the doorbell was sticky with grime. The double door had cracked glass panels and chipped black paint, plastered with notices for last year’s events. Keys rattled, the lock squealed, and the door opened. She clasped the icy handle and pressed it down. The door whined inwards on its hinges.


  1. Use ‘EE’ and ‘S’ Sounds

This is an advanced technique, highly effective especially for audiobooks and public performances, for instance, when you read out your story at a Halloween event.

Certain sounds create certain effects in the reader’s subconscious. This is called ‘euphonics’.

  • To create a creepy impression, use words containing the ‘EE’ sound. In the English language, many words with a creepy meaning actually have that sound: creep, scream, fear, squeal, screech, deep, steep. You can enhance this effect by adding non-creepy words with that sound, such as sleep, sheep, keep, peer, steer, hear, need, near.
  • The ‘S’ sound adds a hint of spookiness. It’s already contained in may spooky words, such as whisper, spook, ghost, spirit, silence, mystery, mist, secret, slither, sinister. Add some other ‘S’ sounds to make it spookier still: stand, steal, stones, sing, sit, crest, base.

Just changing a few words to incorporate those sounds can add a subtle layer of creepy spookiness to your scene. For example, if your character takes a quick look, tweak a few words to let her steal a peak instead. Instead of walking quietly, she sneaks along the path, and the illumination comes not simply from moonlight but from the crescent sliver of the moon.

  1. Chill the Temperature

Give the main character physical chills, and the reader’s subconscious will shiver. Here are some possibilities: the fuel runs out, the camp fire burns down, night falls, the wind picks up. Maybe the action takes place in a cool cellar, a cave, an underground temple or an unheated attic. Perhaps the character is unprepared for the weather or the location, and wears too-thin clothes. Or maybe she’s wet or exposed to the elements. Show how the cold feels to the character, and what she does about it.

Examples: She pulled her cloak tighter around her shivering frame. The wall felt icy to her touch.

The cold seeped through the thin soles of her sandals. She rubbed her stiffening fingers against the encroaching cold. They huddled closer to the fire, seeking warmth. 

Combine Techniques 

I recommend using at least three of these techniques in your scene, selecting the ones that work best for your plot and writing style. Don’t rely on a single technique, but layer them. You will find that each supports the others, for example, darkness also brings chills and more emphasis on sounds.

Here’s one final bit of advice: don’t tell the readers that the experience is creepy. Let them feel the creepiness for themselves.

What kind of creepy scene are you writing or planning to write? Which of these techniques will you apply? Tell me in the Comments section, and I’ll reply.




Are your frightening scenes scary enough? Learn practical tricks to turn up the suspense. Make your readers’ hearts hammer with suspense, their breaths quicken with excitement, and their skins tingle with goosebumps of delicious fright.


Rayne Hall has published more than fifty books in several languages under several pen names with several publishers in severalSulu More Books genres, mostly fantasy, horror and non-fiction. She is the author of the bestselling Writer’s Craft series (Writing Fight Scenes, Writing Scary Scenes, Writing About Villains, Writing About Magic and more) and editor of the Ten Tales short story anthologies.

She is a trained publishing manager, holds a masters degree in Creative Writing, and has worked in the publishing industry for over thirty years.

Having lived in Germany, China, Mongolia and Nepal, she has now settled in a small dilapidated town of former Victorian on thetwitterpic-sulu-wss-skulltouch-capture south coast of England where she enjoys reading, gardening and long walks along the seashore. She shares her home with a black cat adopted from the cat shelter. Sulu likes to lie on the desk and snuggle into Rayne’s arms when she’s writing.

To learn more about Rayne, visit her website or follow her on Twitter where she posts advice for writers, funny cartoons and cute pictures of her cat.

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39 Responses to “Writing Creepy Scenes by Rayne Hall”

  1. Very nice work. I loved this.

    Posted by tony walker | October 26, 2016, 3:06 pm
  2. That’s great post. I know its too hard to write creepy books, but you did a great job rayne hall. I love to read your books. Keep it up.

    Posted by Jiya Sharma | October 27, 2016, 2:30 am
  3. Every detail matters. That’s what Rayne Hall is trying to point out. She is a genius, to be honest.

    Posted by Umar Razi | October 28, 2016, 1:39 am
  4. I think it would be an interesting challenge to write a daylit creepy scene. Maybe the shadows don’t lay quite right and there’s an almost subaudible whisper that always seems to come from behind you. People walking by, smiles a little too fixed, skins a little too smooth…

    Posted by Aimee | October 28, 2016, 6:40 am
  5. Great suggestions! I bookmarked this for future reference. I do enjoy writing scary scenes, but I hesitate to throw myself into anything that is going to include prolonged periods of creepiness. I have enough nightmares without adding to my repertoire!

    Posted by Becke Martin Davis | October 28, 2016, 7:56 pm
  6. “Sounds unrelated to the action slow the pace but increase the suspense.”
    This is do right. I like this effect very much. It can be very thrilling.

    The advice about”Ee” and “S” sounds is just priceless. I imagined right away a small scene using words with those sounds and really crEEped it up 🙂

    Posted by Lilit Galatea | October 29, 2016, 6:17 pm
    • Hi Lilit,
      Inserting background sounds when the reader is already sitting on the edge of her seat and biting her nails is a great way to ratchet up the suspense further. I always have fun doing this.
      Euphonics are fun, too. EE and S for creepiness…. J and CH for joy and cheer, P for authority, pomp, regulations, M for warmth and comforts, W for wild weather… There’s a lot of fun to be had by manipulating the reader’s/listener’s psyche with sounds.

      Posted by Rayne Hall (@RayneHall) | October 30, 2016, 3:32 am
  7. Rayne let me just take this opportunity to say that I think you have perfected all things scary lol. I don’t even know how you come up with all these things. It’s so kind of you to document them so that other readers can benefit. With tips like these, you could rule the creepy story world *insert sinister laugh here*

    Posted by Shenae Richards | October 29, 2016, 10:29 pm
    • Hi Shenae,
      I enjoy scaring and creeping out readers… that’s why I write horror fiction.
      It’s my specialty. 🙂
      I’ve written some books on the subject, guides for writers including “Writing Dark Stories”, “Writing About Villains”, “Writing Scary Scenes”.
      Psst, I’ll let you into a secret: This is really my plot to rule the creepy story world.


      Posted by Rayne Hall (@RayneHall) | October 30, 2016, 3:37 am
  8. Hi Rayne,

    For me, there’s two kinds of creepy. The ‘expected’ creepy, like entering a tomb or a musty, cobweb-laced attic in an old house, and the kind of creepy Aimee mentioned earlier, like his smile didn’t reach his eyes.
    Your post made me think of the scene in Psycho where Anthony Perkins observes the fly crawling on the wall in the attic. He claims he wouldn’t hurt a fly, but his eyes and the sinister expression on his face belie that fact.

    Posted by Jennifer Tanner | November 1, 2016, 1:43 pm
    • Hi Jennifer
      Yes, some creepiness can be expected and obvious and some can be unexpected and subtle – so subtle even that the reader is not consciously aware of it, but it works on a subconscious level.
      The scene from Psycho is an example for how creepiness can be created or increased by contradictions. When the reader sees or senses that something doesn’t quite add up, when appearances belie assurances, when something looks one way but acts another… this creates a soft creepiness that sneaks up on you. It takes some skill to write, but it’s fun to creep readers out this way. 🙂

      Posted by Rayne Hall (@RayneHall) | November 1, 2016, 2:03 pm
  9. I am so happy I found this article now. I want to write a story that has a creepy feel but could never get it right. Thank you so much for your advice

    Posted by ashlee | November 4, 2016, 1:15 pm
  10. I haven’t had an opportunity to write creepy scenes in my books, though it does sound like something I would due in the future. These are great hints on what I could use to really make the scenes come to life.

    Posted by Christine Antosca | November 4, 2016, 3:36 pm
  11. Hello everybody, here every one is sharing such experience, therefore it’s fastidious to read
    this web site, and I used to visit this website daily.

    Posted by | November 14, 2016, 3:37 am
  12. Very helpful, Rayne. Can we have an article on how to work on a romantic plot?

    Posted by Purnendu | January 21, 2017, 12:34 pm
  13. Succumbed to soul seeking Swiss scissors.
    I love the examples.
    Even better would be t have examples from universally popular and acclaimed pieces.
    Find the article very helpful.

    Posted by Nikola Yordanov | August 1, 2017, 1:40 am
    • Succumbed to soul seeking Swiss scissors? Sounds scary!
      Examples from universally popular and acclaimed pieces would stretch the scope of this blog post. I’ve written a book on the topic, and it includes excerpts.

      Posted by Rayne hall | August 10, 2017, 12:57 pm
  14. Wow, thank you for sharing the trick with the ‘EE’ and ‘S’ sounds. I’ve never thought about it but you’re totally right that many “creepy” words contain these sounds. And, as we speak about creating a special mood in the scene I think that the devil is in the details.

    Posted by Ralitsa | August 2, 2017, 3:28 am
  15. Rayne,

    I don’t have any experience with writing novels or fictional scenes, so all of this information and guidance is very new and fresh for me. I am finding it very useful and I am shaking in my boots to apply this in my future projects. I really enjoy the “EE” and “S” words advice. I would have never thought to associate those sounds with eerie settings or creepy sensations, but they most certainly carry a ghastly feel with them! Thank you for sharing all of this wonderful information and writing this great article! Cheers!

    Posted by Dylan Hunter | August 4, 2017, 9:03 pm
  16. I do not write creepy scenes, but I still found this very helpful. I love the tip to use shadows. I think that adds a very scary and suspenseful effect to the writing.

    Posted by Shelby Dowden | August 7, 2017, 3:27 pm
  17. Great tips as always, Rayne! Especially the euphonics.
    If i can add 1 more thing to this list:
    Describe the dwelling where the MC is at and maybe put him/her in a narrow space or a corridor, where the reader can feel claustrophobic.
    If it is an outdoor scene, maybe the MC can walk through shallow water or even better – be half submerged in water, while holding the light above his/her head.

    Posted by Vesso | August 9, 2017, 10:05 am
  18. Every detail matters! I haven’t thought of describing a monster’s hands but I can see now how many feelings it can awaken in the reader. Every little thing is of importance! You are simply amazing.

    Posted by Mark Johnson | August 9, 2017, 12:40 pm
  19. Using the little things for great effect is one of the fun aspects of fiction writing. 🙂

    Posted by Rayne hall | August 10, 2017, 1:02 pm
  20. I love, love, love creepy scenes. I just love to see goosebumps rise as I read or write such scenes. I hope to continue to tap from your wealth of knowledge. I must ask though, some writers say it’s cliche to start the first scene in a chapter of a horror/scary book with eerie sounds or total darkness, what do you think?

    Posted by Victoria | August 14, 2017, 6:32 am
  21. Make sure you use all five senses and show the action from the perspective of the character who has the largest emotional investment, then make it ultimately relatable.

    Posted by John Rose | December 18, 2017, 1:57 am

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